Does my book sound good so far?

Okay, its nice writing but not a captivating beginning. It needs to start off in a way that'll keep the readers attention. This just doesn't. I'd keep this and use it elsewhere, but think of an interesting way to begin the story. Also, in first person, one doesn't often describe themselves. For example, i wouldn't ever say "my brown, curly hair got in my eyes" during a normal conversation, so i wouldn't write that. Descriptions are good! but i wouldn't have your character constantly talking about what they look like.